As a writer, I always want to make the reader feel what's happening in the story. And that's no easy feat, but I've been working on it. 😉
An excerpt from... Ruby Hood, A Twistedly True Tale... the retelling of a classic fairy tale that takes a completely different path over the river and through the Wood.
Immersed in a moment of flux, Ruby hung in mid-nowhere before she landed with a thud. Blackness absorbed every inch of her space, and a deafening silence stifled her. Her
senses roared into overdrive, and a panic rose in her chest. The empty
nothingness of the room over-filled her lungs. Her pulse throbbed as she gasped
for air. How could she have been this wrong? She was to die. Right here. Right
now.
I'd love to hear from you, dear reader. Tell me...do you fell panicked?
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I love that you have focused intensely on the feeling in this short excerpt! It captures poignantly the emotion of losing control.
ReplyDeleteThank you! It is nothing if not a work in progress. 💜
DeleteThis is a great extract from your awesome Ruby Hood series. I can definitely relate to the senses going into over drive and the panic arising in the chest
ReplyDeleteThank you! I been using my own emotions and trying to translate them into words.
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